This is yet another piece of my current fad, poetry, titled "life's mystery, to be or not to be". I do hope you will all try and read it.
There are only a few who are genuinely good,
And there are a few who are genuinely bad.
But a large number of majority both good and bad,
strive daily to gain attention and recognition.
Alas with no apparent bias shown by Him for either good or bad,
the discomfiture of those striving to be good, is indeed bad.
The few good as also evil (Minority) just doing what's to be done, are in bliss,
the others (majority) unable to stir themselves up end up in misery.
The former's obvious following of the paradigm of "just be",
to the latter's perpetual dilemma of "to be or not to be"
seems then is the differentiating principle between these.
By its very defenition temporal world is evolving,
needing the latter set to be existing and surviving.
As when every one gets to the "just be" category,
evolution ceases, and all merge unto Him, the scriptures prophesy.
While, the former has apparently no great need for Him,
the latter, always has sought only a sole refuge in Him.
But yet, He seems to choose to ignore the latter the majority,
and be immensely pleased with the former the minority.
No matter what, is the profoundity of "no differentiation"
for the majority, of this temporal world,
a kick in butt for the bad , and a reward for the good,
kinda mandate seems must from the providence that be.
For the striving good amongst the majority,
to have a meaning for its quest of "to be or not to be",
any negation by Him, of no two-ness of good and evil,
only appear as betrayal and a matter of disastrous peril .
Love Vichu
As one who read the first edition, there appears to be a difference. But then since the original is being played from memory, I can only comment, as you repeatedly say, - "let it be".(BTW, I believe the beatles got away with that poem in your days)
ReplyDeleteI will make a few points that I observed though -
1. If I read the poem without the words "Unto Him", "for Him","in Him" , I find that the rhythm is still preserved and the sense is not lost.It shortens the read and enhances the peotic effect.
2. This suggestion is more of the evolutionary kind. Your poetry could evolve into a "haiku" style of poetry, which to my mind consists of 3 words or multiple of three words in one sentence.
something like..."the more we want, the more want, will want/haunt us." (of course, the quoted example is gibberish but I am sure you can perfect the art with practise on your preferred theme)
3. Last of course you can revert to prosody (humor is still a very good drug!) :-))